The following are real examples of the first page of current resumes (“Before”) that were re-written by Joyce A. Mabe (“After”).
NOTE: Client names and other identifying information have been changed or concealed to protect client identity and confidentiality.
Example #1 BEFORE:
Example #1 AFTER:
Results: The new resume’s format and content better represents and showcases his advanced level of experience. It is also easier to read due to more white space, and ATS-scan ready because it contains important relevant keywords. Starting with a powerful opening statement, the resume’s emphasis is now on his areas of expertise and contributions–the reader can tell right from the start and throughout the resume exactly what he has to offer an organization.
Example #2 BEFORE:
Example #2 AFTER:
Results: The format is now professional, clean, and easy to read (sometimes fancy formats are not the best due to having to scan and search to find important, relevant information). Her location information changed because she is moving and wants a position in her new hometown. Emphasis is now on areas of expertise and contributions–the reader can tell right from the start and throughout the resume exactly what she has to offer an organization. De-emphasized that education is a high school diploma by taking that off the first page and removed graduation year so the resume doesn’t ‘age’ her. Although not shown, another “anti-aging” technique used was to list positions older than 15 years in a footnote without dates. Loaded with targeted keywords that will be picked up by an ATS scan.
Example #3 BEFORE:
Example #3 AFTER:
Results: This client has only worked in one place during her career so the new resume combines positions, summarizes common job duties, and emphasizes contributions. This resume is now much more concise–it was reduced from 3 pages to 1 1/4 pages and is now laser-focused on relevant skills and experience and accomplishments/contributions. It is keyword-rich and no longer contains any dates that might ‘age’ the client (e.g., older previous positions and graduation dates). The powerful career statement and list of skills right up front tell someone scanning quickly exactly how this client could contribute to the organization.